i think we have a winning submission! kudos to you.
attached you'll find the edited version of your article with comments, too. check it out-- make whatever revisions you like. (you don't have to.)
i really like this piece. it's quite solid and critical.
my only suggestion is to add a good opening line to pull in the reader. or not the reader. rather, your piece just needs an opening line that introduces your editorial. plain and simple.
ok. thank you so much for your work. i'm stoked you're writing for op/ed.
have a great Friday!